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    Default Chants and Things.

    This "thing" wasn't written intentionally as poetry, more just to vent on paper. It sounded like a tribal chant in my head as I wrote it, a pounding kind of rhythmn:

    Animosity
    That creeping monstrosity
    How do we fight it?
    Did we invite it?
    A piece of tinder,
    We ignite it.
    Don't feed the flames
    Calling of names
    Placing blames
    You it shames!
    Rise above it
    Reach out and love it
    Extinguish the heat
    Forgiveness has it beat
    Unimportant issues
    Flush away like tissues
    Until you're left with something healthy
    No way in for the mean and stealthy.
    Peace.

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    I could very well see this in a completely different light than chant type stuff. When I read it, it flows sort of like beat poetry. Not the cliche bongo stuff, but Kerouac Mexico City Blues type stuff.
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    Cool, thank you! I didn't really know what to call it, chant seemed the closest thing.

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    I could see this one going many ways!

    Mayhap consider adding to it.

    I like it!
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    It was definitely beat poetry to my ears, DarkThoughts. IT flowed really well and works wonderfully as a recitation or even lyrics.
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    nothing new?
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    Hey damn it! You are a good writer...stop teasing us and write more!!
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    Sorry - I'm doing a bit of research right now for a story - it fairytale-ish and I wanted to brush up on my folklore, to make it as credible as an incredible story can be

    I'll see what I can come up with inbetween though - thanks Jon

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    From this poem, I'll bet you could come up with some pretty nifty spells for any magic wielding character to say in this new story of yours. Yes, the poem did sound like beat poetry but with different words but a similar rhythm it would be a lot like something a witch would chant over her cauldron.

    Edit: I just realized this was posted this past summer. Guess you're done with that story by now anyway.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Darkthoughts View Post
    Sorry - I'm doing a bit of research right now for a story - it fairytale-ish and I wanted to brush up on my folklore, to make it as credible as an incredible story can be

    I'll see what I can come up with inbetween though - thanks Jon
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    bump bump bump

    Bump?

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    Sorry - I must admit I haven't even been in this part of the board since last year.

    The story I was writing was my nanowrimo story, that I didn't complete. I'm very good at starting projects and very bad at finishing them!

    I need to warm up a bit writing wise. I've been painting and drawing more than writing this year...but I'll go check out the poetry circle and other contests, for practise, before I write something more in here

    Thanks for coaxing me back

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