Maybe it wasn't as much as it was an adverb that it didn't flow in the sentence. It seemed forced.
Type: Posts; User: Mattrick
Maybe it wasn't as much as it was an adverb that it didn't flow in the sentence. It seemed forced.
You have good form and prose. The thing, to me, that sticks out like a sore thumb is your use of adverbs. Some of them are words that aren't needed and others could be replaced with non-adverb words....