Requiem for a Fool

[piraterob]

I was riding home after dropping off a few friends the other night and I was listening to Demons and Wizards' "Touched by the Crimson King" album. I came up with one line of poetry and began writing as soon as I got home. Feel free to tell me what you think. Critiques are very welcome.

Requiem for a Fool

I can blame you, can inflame you
but you'll never know my power
My grand plan my winning plan
Always confident, always cower

You'll see my face but never know mine
I'm you, I'm her, I'm him, I'm me
I've been to hell locked up in a cell
But that jail was wasted on me

Come and go, from world to world
There are no gates, there are no borders
I'm here, was there, will be gone in thin air
Bringing chaos to their order

I am darkness, I am madness
but forever number two
Been named all, but never that one
though I'd never deny it to you

Who knows the who of who i am
The whats and whys of my ways
I've gambled all and wasted all
and now despise the end of my days

Reliever of Freedom, Reducer of Function,
Rambling Fiend, Reaper of Faithfulness,
Rival of Fidelity and all around Ruthless Fucker

I couldn't care, and who would want to
I would laugh to see your death
It's an empty room, it's all insane
Belovingly Signed,
R.F.

[Jackie]

Wow that's really good. My favorite line is "I'm here, was there, will be gone in thin air" I don't know why but i just realy like that line

[Jean]

piraterob: thank you for posting! If you are going to post more (which I hope you are), maybe you could think of another name for this thread - since it will contain more poems than that one?

[cozener]

Wow that's really good. My favorite line is "I'm here, was there, will be gone in thin air" I don't know why but i just realy like that line

I think you like it because its a damn ingenious line.

[Jean]

piraterob: do you think this thread can be merged with your Random Poems?

[mia/susannah]

piraterob, that is such a great poem!!! I hope you post more.


I am darkness, I am madness
but forever number two
Been named all, but never that one
though I'd never deny it to you

I don't know why, but that is my favorite paragraph!

[SigTauGimp]

I don't think that piraterob has checked his TDT.com account in some time, due to a move and not having internet for a while...I'll probably talk to him sometime early this week, and tell him to log on here.

[Jean]

[Jon]

Come back Bob!