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    Default Poetry Circle - 3 Words...

    OK, I'm going to get this party started. Here is Letti's explanation of the game...

    "Someone who wasn't in the same gave us 3 words. Always 3. And we could write a poem about everything but those 3 words had to be in it.
    For example:
    - wing
    - tear
    - petal
    It was amazing to see what people could create around the same words. Sometimes they were very similar to each other but sometimes they were very different... one of us wrote about life and the other wrote about death..
    See?"


    So, what we'll do is I'll post 3 words, let people create a poem with those 3 words... when it seems to have been exhausted, we'll pick 3 more words...
    READY???


    blue
    blood
    wings



    and... go!
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    I wrote this over the course of an hour. I decided to try to go with a Sonnet without the typical sonnet theme. It is in the 4/4/4/2 scheme of a Shakespearean sonnet, with abab, cdcd, ee rhyme scheme, but it is not as light hearted as most in that form. I'm not sure how I feel about it yet. This is actually the first time that I have tried to fit something into a rhyme and stanza scheme.

    Blue eyes piercing my heart and soul with ease;
    You know me and play me like a fiddle;
    I will be there, so you do what you please,
    While I wait here and my thumbs do twiddle.
    Wings of ambition carry you away,
    Across the hills and further from my heart;
    What you look for I could never quite say;
    If only I could have a fresh new start
    My heart has no blood to bleed anymore;
    Now it bleeds only sorrow for such loss;
    Bind the wound and set me free, I implore,
    From this crucifixion on love's bleak cross.
    Perhaps I could be happy once more here,
    If I could hold you just once more, my dear.
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    There's one hole in every revolution, large or small. And it's one word long.. people. No matter how big the idea they all stand under, people are small and weak and cheap and frightened. It's people that kill every revolution.

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    How beautiful words. I will give it a try.

    Roland would have understood.

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    Quote Originally Posted by OchrisO View Post
    I wrote this over the course of an hour. I decided to try to go with a Sonnet without the typical sonnet theme. It is in the 4/4/4/2 scheme of a Shakespearean sonnet, with abab, cdcd, ee rhyme scheme, but it is not as light hearted as most in that form. I'm not sure how I feel about it yet. This is actuallyy the first time that i tried to fit something into a rhyme and stanza scheme.

    Blue eyes piercing my heart and soul with ease;
    You know me and play me like a fiddle;
    I will be there, so you do what you please,
    While I wait here and my thumbs do twiddle.
    Wings of ambition carry you away,
    Across the hills and further from my heart;
    What you look for I could never quite say;
    If only I could have a fresh new start
    My heart has no blood to bleed anymore;
    Now it bleeds only sorrow at such loss;
    Bind the wound and set me free, I implore,
    From this crucifixion on love's bleak cross.
    Perhaps I could be happy once more here,
    If only I could hold you once my dear.
    Wow.

    Roland would have understood.

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    very nice!
    There's a fine line between stupid and clever.

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    Okay, that was great.

    Does Chris give us the next three words or should we keep going with those?
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    I think the plan was to let people use the same three words till it seems they were exhausted and then new words would be picked.
    The Awesomest fled across the desert and The Awesomer followed.

    If you rescue me
    Iíll be your friend forever


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    Ah, that is actually a really cool way to do it.

    I am going to have to put my poetry hat on.
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    I lost my poetry hat.
    The Awesomest fled across the desert and The Awesomer followed.

    If you rescue me
    Iíll be your friend forever


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    Quote Originally Posted by Brice View Post
    I lost my poetry hat.
    I have found it.
    Here it is, dear.

    Roland would have understood.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Letti View Post
    Quote Originally Posted by Brice View Post
    I lost my poetry hat.
    I have found it.
    Here it is, dear.

    The Awesomest fled across the desert and The Awesomer followed.

    If you rescue me
    Iíll be your friend forever


    I wish that I could write fiction, but that seems almost an impossibility. -howard phillips lovecraft (1915)



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    Quote Originally Posted by Brice View Post
    Quote Originally Posted by Letti View Post
    Quote Originally Posted by Brice View Post
    I lost my poetry hat.
    I have found it.
    Here it is, dear.

    It looks good on you.

    Roland would have understood.

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    OK, enough kissy-kissy and start writing!
    blue
    wings
    blood
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    Odetta is right..

    Roland would have understood.

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    I dream in blue--every shade you can think of but...
    just blue
    In the landscape of my mind, spinning above the clouds
    just blue
    If I had wings I could fly away to find something new
    other than blue
    The quest for freedom sings in my blood
    but its all just blue

    **this was off the top of my head and I don't even know if it could be considered poetry.
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    poetry it is, sir!
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    I wish for many a thing - but I wish more for wings.
    For these wings I would give away my posessions - my house, my car, my things.

    I pine for many a place - but they all lead me back to the blue.
    "The sky!," I hear the voice inside me cry. "The sky!"

    With these wings I would fulfill these fantasies of limitless blue.
    With these wings I'd quell these demands coursing thru my blood.
    With these wings I would capture my blue.

    Kinda lame, but what can you do.
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    All my words are falling short
    And there's so much I want to say"

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    They come from the North, and their eyes are blue
    Hush, little baby, don’t cry
    If they don’t hear us, they will not take you
    This time they might pass you by

    The blood in their veins is cold as their snow
    Hush, little baby, don’t cry
    They’ll bury their dead and away they will go
    They cannot live under our sky.

    The hawks on their shoulders are spreading their wings
    Hush, little baby, don’t cry
    In silence they march, both soldiers and kings,
    All those who tomorrow will die.

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    bears are back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    These are really good you guys, I love coming in and reading peoples use of the three words.

    Great game.
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    ok, i'm just going to freestyle this as I just finished reading you guys additions.

    Blue blood pours from veins
    almost desiccated from passion
    bound to you without chains
    you, my own assassin

    on wings of scarlet you have rose
    and carried me aloft
    my lips of scarlet you have dosed
    with countless kisses; soft

    and yet this blue which pours from me
    this station of my birth
    i've bled away, if I could be
    deserving of your worth

    so promise your soul to me, my dear
    and I'll be your sun; you'll be my cheer.


    ok, i tried to follow the Shakespearean form, and ababa cdcd efef gg scheme that was used previously. Nameless and Jean so far are really kicking ass.
    "So many vows. They make you swear and swear. Defend the King, obey the King, obey your father, protect the innocent, defend the weak. But what if your father despises the King? What if the King massacres the innocent? It's too much. No matter what you do, you're forsaking one vow or another."

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    This thread has become my favourite.
    And I am totally speechless...

    Roland would have understood.

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    you're right, Letti that was horrible. I should have put some thought into it.
    "So many vows. They make you swear and swear. Defend the King, obey the King, obey your father, protect the innocent, defend the weak. But what if your father despises the King? What if the King massacres the innocent? It's too much. No matter what you do, you're forsaking one vow or another."

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    Quote Originally Posted by JohnBlaze View Post
    you're right, Letti that was horrible. I should have put some thought into it.
    Who the blue hell told you it's horrible???

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    you did, but that's ok.

    i have rewritten it, here it is.

    Blue blood pours from veins
    almost desiccated from passion
    bound to you without chains
    you, my soul's assassin

    on wings of scarlet you have rose
    and carried me aloft
    my lips of scarlet you have dosed
    with downlips, so soft

    and yet this blue which pours from me
    this station of my birth
    I've bled away, if I could be
    deserving of your worth

    so promise your soul to me, my love
    and then take us both above



    not sure i like this ending better. let me try again



    Blue blood pours from veins
    almost desiccated from passion
    bound to you without chains
    you, my heart's assassin

    on wings of scarlet you have rose
    and carried me aloft
    my lips of scarlet you have dosed
    with down lips, so soft

    and yet this blue which pours from me
    this station of my birth
    I've bled away, if I could be
    deserving of your worth

    I've given my heart to you, my dear
    and promised you this, I pray sincere.




    That might be best. WHat do you think, Letti?
    "So many vows. They make you swear and swear. Defend the King, obey the King, obey your father, protect the innocent, defend the weak. But what if your father despises the King? What if the King massacres the innocent? It's too much. No matter what you do, you're forsaking one vow or another."

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    To tell you the truth John I love them all.

    Roland would have understood.

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