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    No title yet...wrote a sonnet, no real prescribed format (rhyme scheme, iambic pentameter etc).

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    He has sat there for an eternity,
    Chair, stone and man alone in the corner.
    The chisel an extension of his hand
    That chips away at his razor sharp vision.

    A beautiful face appears from the rock,
    Just as he had envisioned in his minds eye.
    Against the vision his hand slips, how?
    The stone becomes stone, imperfect again.

    The man is gone, a finite shelf life.
    The statue still stands in the corner
    While the earth reclaims itself, green feelers
    Creeping and dragging it down slowly.

    A ruined dream discarded and lifeless,
    A perfect definition for what life is.

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    I like it. Well done.

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    Cool, I like poems that don't rhyme. Word meaning is more important I think.

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    There is one rhyme, in the final couplet.

    Thanks guys.

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    very good very good
    If you love me then love me..

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