My everything

[Letti]

Okay. I hope I start this thread at the right place if not please feel free to move or merge it.

Here is an old "poem" of mine.


My Everything

My sky, my ground, my air
my star-grassy field
my bed, my pillow, my duvet
my flower-opener dawn
this is my everything

My night, my dream, my lights
my tale-teller steps
my miracle, my pearl, my desires
my wings closed into my eyes
this is my everything

And if I can hear your voice for a minute
if I can feel your kiss on my lips
These things are with me
because you are all - my everything



Thank you for your care to come here.
I will send more later with pleasure.


And for Jean's sake, the real one in Hungarian.


Mindenem

Egem, földem, levegőm
Csillag füves legelőm
Ágyam, párnám, paplanom
Virág nyitó hajnalom
ez mind az én Mindenem

Estém, álmom, fényeim
Mesét zengő lépteim
Csodám, gyöngyöm, vágyaim
Szemembe zárt szárnyaim
ez mind az én Mindenem

S ha percnyit Hangod hallhatom
Ha csókod érzem ajkamon
Ott van mindez én velem
Hisz Te vagy mind a Mindenem

vége

[Brice]

Yes, please do so.

[The_Nameless]

I certaintly hope that there are more to come.

[Jean]

Nikolett, thank you so much for having posted it!



Could you please, whenever you post a poem that was originally written in Hungarian, provide the original version, too? Even if we don't read Hungarian, we can see how the lines are organized, what is the rhyming order, the alternation of long/short words, etc.

[Letti]

Thank you my friends. Thanks a million.

[Letti]

Nikolett, thank you so much for having posted it!



Could you please, whenever you post a poem that was originally written in Hungarian, provide the original version, too? Even if we don't read Hungarian, we can see how the lines are organized, what is the rhyming order, the alternation of long/short words, etc.

Done, dear Jean.

[ManOfWesternesse]

It's a great poem Letti, and none the worse for having been read before.
I'm not 'into' poetry in a big way at all - but when it's as simple & clean & straightforward as this I can like it.

[Letti]

Thank you, thank you Brian.

[Matt]

Great stuff Letti.

[John Blaze]

Great stuff Letti, i only wish I knew hungarian so I could enjoy this in it's pure form.

[Letti]

Great stuff Letti, i only wish I knew hungarian so I could enjoy this in it's pure form.

I wish I knew English more and I could express myself as much as in Hungarian.
But mother tongue is mother tongue.

[Letti]

Love me
(to my Moon)

Love me just because - without causes
Love me because I do exist
Our love is being built slowly
Our treasure is saved by my hands

Love me often itty-bitty
Just sometimes love me very much
My soul drinks from your eyes
and if it's too greedy - I let it be

Love me in silence, softly
Smile at me with your desired lips
Our hot silence fights with noice
and asks you to love me more

And if flew too high
if I asked you too much
Please know: the biggest present is
that I may love you

Don't love me
let me love you




In Hungarian:

Szeress
(Holdamhoz)

Szeress csak úgy, okok nélkül
Szeress azért, mert létezem
Szerelmünk így lassan épül
Kincsünk őrzi két kezem

Szeress sokszor ici-picit
Csupán néha szeress nagyon
Lelkem Szemedből iszik
S hogyha mohó, reá hagyom

Szeress néma csendben, halkan
Kívánt Száddal, most rám nevess
Izzó csendünk küzd a zajjal
És arra kér, hogy még szeress

És ha túl magasra szállnék
Ha Tőled túl sokat kérek
Tudd: a legnagyobb ajándék
Hogy én szerethetlek Téged

Ne szeress,
hadd szeresselek én

[John Blaze]

i really realli like this one. It rhymed in hungarian though, didn't it?

[Letti]

i really realli like this one. It rhymed in hungarian though, didn't it?

Oh yes it did. A lot.
I worked on it a lot.


Thank you for the kind words.

[Letti]

Here is one... which is okay in English. Just okay.


Behind my blue eyes

Behind my blue eyes
Among such nice lines
over the smiles
storms are living

Behind my desires
Among my pearl-words
Nobody sees
but I break into tears

Behind my face
Among the faiths
sometimes I don't know
who I am

My mistakes can't but my
tears can be hidden
by my soft hair
Please accept me
to make me able to
accept myself

[John Blaze]

touching Letti, just ::tears UP::

ok, i really liked this one. I found myself singing it in my head. I think it would make a good song.

[ManOfWesternesse]

Blue Eyes is very good. English may not be your first language but you do very well in it. I wonder (and I may be way off the mark) do I like it because it's not written in your first language, which keeps the language simple while expressing complex thoughts?
(As I've said before - generally speaking I'm not at all a lover of Poetry - and so probably a poor critic as well). - Anyway - I like what I like, and I love this.

[Letti]

Blue Eyes is very good. English may not be your first language but you do very well in it. I wonder (and I may be way off the mark) do I like it because it's not written in your first language, which keeps the language simple while expressing complex thoughts?
(As I've said before - generally speaking I'm not at all a lover of Poetry - and so probably a poor critic as well). - Anyway - I like what I like, and I love this.

Thank you, Brian.
When I write a poem in Hungarian I usually use very simple pictures words and expressions to describe what I would like to say or show.
It's simple because it's simple in Hungarian as well.
It's my style if I have any.

thank you again

[ManOfWesternesse]

[QUOTE=Letti;6320]
It's my style if I have any.
QUOTE]

Oh you've got style Letti, there's none of us in any doubt about that!
Now back to the poetry

[Jean]

Oh you've got style Letti, there's none of us in any doubt about that!

hear, hear!

[Letti]

[Letti]

Something short:

Perfect

Vases break
Loves fade
And one day even the light-giver bulb
reaches its last hours

Nothing can be prefect forever
just those things
that can never be ours

[Jon]

You are as beautiful with words as you are in pictures!

I love the poems!

[Jon]

More plesae?

[Letti]

More plesae?

*tries not to look into those eyes...*