Eternal Distance

[Jackie]

One thing you guys should know about me is i love to write. And i write a lot of poetry. I searched the threads and came up with nothing previously realted to poetry so i decided to creat this thread where i will share my poetry to get you opnions and where other people can share their poetry. [Also if you owould just like to post a poem you like and the reason you like it that would be ok too. Just make sure to credit the author ]

Ok so he's the first poem of mine i will post on here. It's fairly new [pretty much just wrote it last week] and i've made a lot of revisons to it and im not sure that im done revising it yet but here it is.

Piano Keys

Why can't the keys on this piano,
play that old song
The cords must be broken
That must be the answer I'm sure
But how to fix them I'm not,
for it must be done with care,
or the evidence it was once broken,
will forever remain there
It would never be the same
Some keys might not sound right
Some not at all
But with the right care
It might someday, hope to be repaired,
and no one may notice,
that a defect was ever there
With the right delicasy and care,
the keys on this piano,
might someday be able to play that old song,
and when that time comes,
maybe then I'll have my voice,
and be able to sing along

[Daghain]

Nice Jackie!

Actually, there are all kinds of threads in Turtleback Lane for member's writings - I'll get a mod to move this for you.

[Jackie]

Ah, yea I'm so new to this site and so horrible at finding the right place to post a thread
But thanks for helping me get it moved then
And thank, i think this is my favorite poem I've written so far

[Daghain]

No problem, that's why we're here.

[Jean]

hi Jackie, you didn't have to worry, bears are vigilant here!

Now, would you like to leave the title of your thread "Poetry", or would you give it another name (you could change it in the future if it stopped satisfying you)?

[Jackie]

[A poem i wrote off the top of my head yesterday originally posted on François Villon Contest thread]

His King is Dead

His King is dead, His army is defeated.
His city burns in ruin.
He stands watching helplessly.
Frozen in time and space.
He is unable to fix, the damage that has been done.
He can not claim a victory, this is a battle that has not been won

All hope is lost,
In the flames of his lost King.
His city lost, his army too,
And nothing he could ever do
He stands and watches
Tears burn his eyes
As the flames engulf,
what was left of his pride

His King is dead, His army is defeated
He walks away, shoulders slumped over
His feet drag in the ash,
that was once a beautiful city
That once had a king,
that once had an army,
that once protected his city
where people use to live in harmony
But now nothings left, but ash, regrets and loss

Oh, and only him
Don't forget about him
He is left to wallow in his sorrow
Of the greatest loss of all
As he stood there and watched helpless
As the crimson king made the tower fall

[Jean]

so, do we keep the title of this thread just "poetry"?

[Jon]

Good work Ma'am. Its nice to have another poet around.

[Jackie]

Um, I'm not sure can we even change it? And if we can what do you sugest we change it to Jean?

Thanks Jon , Do you wirte poetry?

[Jean]

he writes fantastic poetry! go to the Index (in TBack Lane) and look under "Jon", you will be surprised!

About the title: you can't change it, but I can. Think of the name you would like to give your first Poetry Collection if it was to be published?

[Jackie]

Hmm I'm not sure, I'll definitly have to think on that, if i come up with anything I'll be sure to post or message you.

[Jackie]

Each Time I Look at You

Each time I look at you
I wonder if the love i see is true
Your known to lie,
Your know to deceive
So why on earth should i believe,
That your love is true?
Or that your heart is pure?

I sigh and wonder if i should walk through that door
Shall i take the chance?
And possibly the fall
Should i believe what you say?
Forgetting your past,
and your previous reputations

When i think about this i wonder
Is it even worth the fall?
Are you worth risking it all?
I hear sometimes, people change
But does that apply to a person like you?
I just have such a hard time
Believing your feeling are true

I look in your eyes
and i want to believe
But my heart doesn't let me
It reminds me you deceive

So this time I'll walk away
With my heart still intact
Because it and i have made a pact
To stick together
and not let you break us
because your known for just that

So with that said,
I’ll turn away
With out looking back
Because I’d rather not think
Of what we could have had

[Jackie]

Same Old Scene

Here we are again
Standing in the rain
This sad old scene
Is always the
Different times,
Different places
But always us
Drifting apart

Apparently this isn’t suppose to be
Because if it was
This scene wouldn’t be the same
It wouldn’t keep ending like this
Or fit so perfectly into the game

Can’t you see, can’t you see
You and I aren’t suppose to be
We should just do ourselves a favor
And end it all now
Once and for all

All those long lonely nights
Not sleeping at all
Days without eating
It’s not healthy at all

We are destroying ourselves
And destroying each other
There aren’t many more times we can take this fall
During the next one,
I feel we’ll lose it all

Our friendship,
Our trust
The faith we have in others
The faith we have in finding love
So let’s just say goodbye now
To spare us of that fate

We have our whole lives ahead of us
One day we’ll find where we belong
And whom we belong with in that place
But it’s not with each other
The truth, that it is

We both know it’s better
To just walk away
And if it’s really meant to be
Our paths may cross again
If that’s true, I can almost promise you
We’ll see each other again someday

And if we are
To see each other again
We’ll decide from there,
What we will do
Maybe in the future it will be possible
For me to be with you

[Jackie]

Last Breath

This may very well be my last breath
Right here, where I lay
In this cold hospital bed
The room smells of disease and death
It’s so cold that I can see my breath

I lay staring at the ceiling
Wondering,
Is it really going to end like this?
Is that really all?
Lying right here in this hospital bed?

I feel so weak
My heart so small
I’ve never known so much pain
And some how I just know,
I will never feel anything again

My chest tightens up
It’s getting harder to breath
I just want the pain to go away
Even if it means
That I will never see another day

I hear the sound of alarms now
As my heart rate plummets
Things around me start to fade to black
I’m going now, and quickly
No medical attention can stop that

The doctors and nurses surround me
They look worried,
Tying to decide what to do
But they are left flabbergasted
Because there’s nothing they can do
They’ve already tried everything
This is the end it’s true

The sirens they sing
And slowly die away
They are now pulling the sheet over my face
Can it be?, It can’t!
I can’t really be dead!
I can’t die here!
Not in this hospital bed!

I’m not ready to say goodbye
This isn’t the way it was suppose to end
My life cut short, on this hospital bed
If I still could, I’d weep
But my eyes, now life less,
Have no tears to spare


All that’s left is a memory
That I was once there
Living my life with out a care
Slowly fading from the fabric of reality
Until I simply wasn’t there

But none of that matters
It’s all over now
Nothing can beat death
Or change reality
This is just the way it must be
Goodbye everyone,
I’ve finally been set free

[Jon]

It is so awesome to see a long poem that maintains it's structure (metaphorically speaking.) I struggle with that so much.


And thank you Jean, for such a wonderful endorcement above.

[Jackie]

Thanks Jon

[Jackie]

hmm not my best, but what ever, tell me what you think

Empty Field of Ruin

This empty field of ruin
Was once full of life
Filled to the brim,
With beautiful flowers
That sang endlessly in the wind

This field empty of ruin
Now browned with death
Deterioration of life,
as far as the eye can see
A ruin of what once was beauty
That will lay in peoples hearts for eternity

This field of empty ruin
Sees no light of day
The rain never falls here
It is just left to decay

One day the flowers,
Just started to wilt away
And everyone ignored it
Watching it’s beauty die away

There’s nothing anyone can do now
To bring back it’s life
The field will never sing again
Everlasting beauty eventually meets it’s end

Looking at this field
You would never imagine it that way
That once this field was beautiful
And sang so softly
in the sunshine of the first spring day

But now this field
Will never return in May
Clouds block the sunlight
Every spring day

The sun has gone,
The rain hides in the gloomy clouds
Of the first spring day
The crisp wilted flowers
Slowly sway in the wind,
Singing their goodbye

There’s no hope in their voice
They know one day
That a parking lot will be here
In this field where they lay
They know this as everyone knows
Beauty always fades away

[Jackie]

Despair

There is no hope
Only despair
Spelled out in the air
Dispersing from your mouth

Screaming, from every word
You ever whispered
Dangling in the threads of time
These words that cant not escape your mind

Despair is spelt all around
Written in every word and sound
These is no escape, not from despair
For me, for you
It’s always there

[Jackie]

Death


Rose pedals crumble
Beneath the autumn sun
Falling to the earth
Shriveling against the cold ground
Silently departing without a sound

Cold steam,
Rolls off your breath
As the wind, whispers in your ear
A cold familiar song
It dances in your ear
A song you can not escape
A song that even the deaf can hear

You can not run away
It will always catch up
It can not be out smarted
Nor tricked or misled
It will get you in your sleep
In what was the comfort of your bed

It taps on your shoulder
And you must turn around
You do not have a choice
Everyone must turn around sometime
If you do not, it will nibble away at your mind

Eventually you will,
You will turn around
Because everyone does
No one can resist
Deaths first, and final kiss

[Jackie]

Reality

Don't cry for me, cry for yourselves
For all your losses
Dreams, and hopes
The reality you knew
was nothing but a hoax

I wish I could tell you different
But that would be a lie
You’ll find out yourselves
On that day which you die

It was all a hoax
None but an illusion
Brought on by your mind
And mine

A story thought up
Although its very far
From once upon a time
Because once upon a time
Always ends with happily ever after
But after this you’ll see
Far from happy you’ll be

Reality is not what we see
It’s not what we breath
Not what we hear
And not what we touch
Our brain deceives us you see
This is a reality that will never be

It’s really a good one,
A trick I mean
For your brain to pull it off
And make you think
Your feeling reality
But the truth is, you see
There is no reality

[William50]

I really liked Reality and Despair. You have skills!

[Jackie]

Thanks William

[Jon]

I really liked Reality and Despair. You have skills!

I must say that I like "Death" better...but she dooo have sum skllz!

[Jackie]

I Want to Tell You

I want to be there,
There in your arms
Close enough, to hear your breath
And feel your heart beating

I want to be the reason,
For the smile on your face
And the reason,
That your heart does race

I want to run my fingers through your hair
Lean close to you and whisper,
That no matter what I’ll always be there
And that I’ll never let go

I want to sleep next to you,
Keeping you warm on cold nights
Falling asleep in each others arms,
Sounds so nice

I want to spend all day with you
Talking about absolutely nothing
Just enjoying each others company
There’s no one else, I’d rather do nothing with

I want to walk with you,
Us hand and hand
Even if we were silent
Because sometimes words can’t describe it

I want to let you know,
What my true feelings are
And that there’s nothing in the world
I want more, then to be there in your heart

[Jackie]

Crying

I cry in my heart
When everyone’s around
But no one will ever know
Because on the outside I don’t make a sound

I cry when I’m alone
Which it seems is pretty often
Especially at night, when all seems dead
And I lay there alone in my bed

I cry myself to sleep
Because there’s always something wrong
It’s stupid to have hope
Hope is always wrong

I cry in the rain
Because no one can tell
I’d rather not show emotions
It’s a weakness known too well

I cry in my sleep
For the dreams that will never be reality
Because a dream, is just a fantasy,
One which will never be

Crying is a weakness
That I will never show
I’m always crying
But no one will ever know