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RolandStageDive
04-03-2009, 09:51 PM
Basically, I'm just making this thread for when I come post crappy excuses for poetry or short prose or single chapters from longer prose to see if they're useful for anything. I do have ONE piece, that is a word in progress I'd like to share.


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The Breaking Breeze
Set sail amidst
A long and broken night
Two months 'til freeze
They fled the blitz
Their village by flame alight

Among their kind
Those smiths, many guards
A swordsman true, an archer too
A healer and his blind
Three famous bards
and six sailors for a crew

And at the head
Sat the captain's boy
Mere child but much afeared
The crow's nest his bed
Him far too coy
To so few was he endeared

A mighty storm
That blew at dawn
O'er took the Breeze
Fear now born
The boy's wits are drawn
Rising to his knees

Three words he chants
His face so fixed
On slender violent storms
Solid gaze like a lance
As storm and more mixed
And amongst the clouds raced ethereal forms

Just three breaths past
The storm stops
Parting the center
The sun blasts
One gust lops
a towering thunderhead- O' praise, Defender


I guess it's just going to be a poem about a ship's journey over seas with a wizard aboard up to mischief and great deeds.

Count Olaf
04-03-2009, 10:00 PM
Looks good!

I'll be looking forward to your future works

alinda
04-03-2009, 10:30 PM
Me too! I like it . Welcome to the site Locke! :grouphug:I hope to see alot of you in these threads, your a fing young man, and a poet like your DA!:huglove:

mia/susannah
04-04-2009, 04:48 AM
Locke, that is great. I enjoyed reading this poem. I am looking forward to more from you to read.

Jean
04-04-2009, 05:56 AM
bears are impressed... looks like talents run in families...http://i91.photobucket.com/albums/k291/mishemplushem/Facilitation/bear_happy.gif

RolandStageDive
04-04-2009, 10:24 AM
Thanks for the warm welcome everyone :)

I see now that this wasn't the place for poetry so I won't post anymore in this particular forum, but in the correct one in the future XP Sorry, all.

Count Olaf
04-08-2009, 08:46 PM
Waiting

Brice
04-08-2009, 08:48 PM
Thanks for the warm welcome everyone :)

I see now that this wasn't the place for poetry so I won't post anymore in this particular forum, but in the correct one in the future XP Sorry, all.


If you like one of us can just move this thread there, Locke.

Jean
04-08-2009, 10:59 PM
Locke: it depends on whether you're going to post only poetry here, or prose and maybe non-fiction, too. as I understood from your starter post. In the latter case, this thread should stay here; if you want it reserved for poetry only, I'll move it.

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Chap
04-09-2009, 01:22 AM
That's great, man! I'm not a fan of poems, and rarely like the stuff I read, but this one I really enjoyed. Nice rhymes and rhythm, IMO.

:clap:

RolandStageDive
04-10-2009, 11:30 PM
Thanks Brice, Jean, Chap. I reckon since I intend to use it for all it could stay then :-D Thanks, just didn't want to upset anyone.

Cort
04-11-2009, 05:11 AM
Nice poem RSD, im also not big on poetry but i liked this one, i must be changing in my old age