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Delacroix
12-14-2010, 07:30 AM
Hey everyone!

I've just finished the Dark Tower serie right now, and I felt like writting a poem. It's nothing worthy, really, but I liked writting it. Tell me what you think.


Born in darkness.
Born in cold .
Here comes Kaís fool all alone.
Walks around this alien world.
Trying to find the reason why.
Why he,
Wouldnít die in the dirt,
Even if all wanted him so.
His mother dreams of him lying stiff
Somewhere in some rat-filled place.

But a voice is calling him.
COME TO ME.
My dearest son.
COME TO ME.
And forget the ones youíd have loved.

Betrayed and mutilated,
The undue child hears these words,
And so hatefull is his heart,
He decides to follow,
The one he thinks as only friend.

COME TO ME.
My dearest son.
COME TO ME.
And Iíll grant all what you dream of!
I his tiny loveless heart,
He welcomed these cursed words.

And exchanging love for hate,
He stepped on his two frail legs,
To pursue the parents whom,
Sent him from the cradle to,
The black cold land of lonelyness.

Food is sweet,
Food is warm,
His only love in food ended,
Baby Mordredís a-hungry.
Here comes a careless fellow,
To share his love,
Maybe his meal.
He sure will, poor thing, poor thing,
Be lone Mordredís only glee.

By his mouth he lives delight.
By his mouth heíll taste his death.

For that even past twenty
Lone Mordredís just a baby.

Thanks for reading. The blue lines can fit the instrumental of the song "Stein um stein", by Rammstein.

kluker
12-16-2010, 01:45 PM
Awesome :thumbsup:

Delacroix
12-23-2010, 01:43 PM
Thank you kind sir :cowboy:

I'll try to post other poems soon. I'm also working to improve this one. I like its general idea but oh god it needs some changes.

PS: Did you try to read it with the music?

kluker
12-23-2010, 01:46 PM
Tried to but my mind can't function that way yet slowly getting to where I can hear the music when reading something.
Good luck with the editing